Thursday, 11 September 2014

the house by Jonni

W.A.L.T use varied sentences beginning and lengths
what I think I did well was describing
thing and objects.I think I need to do better is come up with better punctuation.

the smashed windows were not stable the smashed window
pieces were all over the grass the bleached weatherboard the wallpaper was ripped the roof was rotten mice running around. The door
scratched and rusty the air vents were shaking around.
The wind making noise the corners were filled with spiders and webs underneath the floorboards were spiders mice. Possums jumping from wall to wall there was no electricity.

Wednesday, 10 September 2014

the storm

                          the storm
‘’Bam’’ I heard hailstones smacking against the window  The storm was raging and the puffy dark clouds spewed up lighting
as I walked downstairs,to turn on the light. The light                  immediately went off again, so i went back upstairs . I saw a man in the corner of my eye. He had purple lips a pale face and  shivering legs .but it was all part of my imagination  I heard raging wind whooshing as though it was   growling at me. The watery roof  was dripping like a shower I heard hailstone    banging against the shed.
suddenly I heard puddles splashing  . I looked out the window,
the trees looked like they were being swept away by the vicious wind. the storm was subsiding  yae as I yelled happily  .

Explanation writing

W.A.L.T a Explanation