Thursday, 11 September 2014

the house by Jonni

W.A.L.T use varied sentences beginning and lengths
what I think I did well was describing
thing and objects.I think I need to do better is come up with better punctuation.

the smashed windows were not stable the smashed window
pieces were all over the grass the bleached weatherboard the wallpaper was ripped the roof was rotten mice running around. The door
scratched and rusty the air vents were shaking around.
The wind making noise the corners were filled with spiders and webs underneath the floorboards were spiders mice. Possums jumping from wall to wall there was no electricity.





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